A nice concept. Mostly well executed but with some issues. On the good side, at over 20k words it isn't some of the usual KU 5K sludge that gets hammered and tossed out ad nauseam. Obvious effort to tell a coherent story went in to this novella. Kudos for that.
Now the less good. The first chapter is awash in comma's. Like, a lot, so the commas, pull your attention, from the story. I don't know if I just became inured to them or the author become more sure of their writing as the pages progressed.
Writing in first person present tense is difficult, and this novella does not rise above it. Verb tenses slip at times, just enough to break the spell. Some of time shifts that happen don't really work well because the story is supposed to be happening now, as we read it. Those cuts have the feeling of someone growing bored writing the current event and just wanting to skip ahead, jarring the reader out of the 'now' flow. I never really felt connected with the narrator because of that.
The book would have worked much better in the past tense delivered from a reflecting narrator. As it is, I'm not sorry I read it, but I doubt I'll look for more of the series.
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